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Post by Raymond Neely on Jan 22, 2011 7:20:05 GMT -5
by Raymond Neely
The whooshing spittle of the whirlling world roar and five million powerless, the thousand cyclones of arcane damnations unleashed, the unstoppable will of rising water, its persistent continuousness, its broken concentration, the tidal waves, palms of Poseidon, raise the watery streets as of Venice amid the machines of oil and gas and rake the sea walls, the thundering rumble and grumble of breaking rock, of the mountain of a god head, rupturing the day and date, the whooshing spittle of the whirrling world roar, on your windowpanes, in your ears pump your fists and stomp take your shirt off outside.
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Post by sambpoet on Jan 22, 2011 10:06:10 GMT -5
Some good alliteration here to help via sound the smooth movement of your lines.
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Post by sambpoet on Jan 22, 2011 10:09:19 GMT -5
Some good alliteration here to help via sound the smooth movement of your lines.
Sal Buttaci
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Post by stephengodfrey on Jan 23, 2011 16:14:17 GMT -5
Very nice buddy. really like the palms of Poseidon line. Steve
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Post by Raymond Neely on Jan 25, 2011 9:59:23 GMT -5
Thanks guys.
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